Comments on: Anniversary Sonnet http://www.amtrekker.com/poetry/336 I'm an unemployed vagrant. All I have is a backpack full of technology, a shoestring budget and a very important list. When everything is crossed off my list I get to go home! Let me know if you want to trade one of those shoestrings for help. brett@amtrekker.com Thu, 20 Nov 2008 18:34:42 +0000 http://wordpress.org/?v=2.2.1 By: Brett http://www.amtrekker.com/poetry/336#comment-3764 Brett Wed, 09 Jul 2008 22:43:19 +0000 http://www.amtrekker.com/poetry/336#comment-3764 Nice work so far, team! Nice work so far, team!

]]> By: just ilott http://www.amtrekker.com/poetry/336#comment-3761 just ilott Wed, 09 Jul 2008 22:28:52 +0000 http://www.amtrekker.com/poetry/336#comment-3761 I've figured out the problem with me My perfection is somewhat a sham For despite all of my modesty I don't know how good looking I am Yes, I've dapper good looks and a wit oh so cunning And eyes like a caribbean sea At a glance you may think you saw Zeus out sunning But his lightning's got nothing on me Wait a sec, is this to be about brett-it? Well, I'll pass since I'm already done Start over? Well sir, I say you can forget it. For you've been taught narcissism's more fun. Almost done w the list, I think you all would agree That his sole inspiration was little old me. I’ve figured out the problem with me
My perfection is somewhat a sham
For despite all of my modesty
I don’t know how good looking I am

Yes, I’ve dapper good looks and a wit oh so cunning
And eyes like a caribbean sea
At a glance you may think you saw Zeus out sunning
But his lightning’s got nothing on me

Wait a sec, is this to be about brett-it?
Well, I’ll pass since I’m already done
Start over? Well sir, I say you can forget it.
For you’ve been taught narcissism’s more fun.

Almost done w the list, I think you all would agree
That his sole inspiration was little old me.

]]> By: georgerocks http://www.amtrekker.com/poetry/336#comment-3746 georgerocks Wed, 09 Jul 2008 17:23:04 +0000 http://www.amtrekker.com/poetry/336#comment-3746 With green hat on head and laptop in tow our amtrekker set out across the land without a plan, or real places to go just a list he kept always in hand "strangers are friends you just haven't met" was his credo throughout this whole venture he says he'll go home when he's done, but I'll bet Brett will be still doing this when he's in dentures cuz Brett sucks at planning, it's sad but it's true perhaps that green had has constricted his brain but still out of fifty he's crossed off quite a few how you ask? it's hard to explain Brett keep on trekking until you are through and I'll be here the whole time to make fun of you (IAMBIC PENTAMETER AND CORRECT NUMBER OF SYLLABLES BE DAMNED!) With green hat on head and laptop in tow
our amtrekker set out across the land
without a plan, or real places to go
just a list he kept always in hand

“strangers are friends you just haven’t met”
was his credo throughout this whole venture
he says he’ll go home when he’s done, but I’ll bet
Brett will be still doing this when he’s in dentures

cuz Brett sucks at planning, it’s sad but it’s true
perhaps that green had has constricted his brain
but still out of fifty he’s crossed off quite a few
how you ask? it’s hard to explain

Brett keep on trekking until you are through
and I’ll be here the whole time to make fun of you

(IAMBIC PENTAMETER AND CORRECT NUMBER OF SYLLABLES BE DAMNED!)

]]> By: ESC http://www.amtrekker.com/poetry/336#comment-3735 ESC Wed, 09 Jul 2008 00:16:08 +0000 http://www.amtrekker.com/poetry/336#comment-3735 ok now that is a massive load of rules and u know i'm not a very good rule-follower and thus tend to make up my own on occasion, but i'll see what i can do. that was such a run-on sentence... see, i'm already failing at the english language. i may need some time for this one. i'll bust this out later... stay tuned, friend. ok now that is a massive load of rules and u know i’m not a very good rule-follower and thus tend to make up my own on occasion, but i’ll see what i can do. that was such a run-on sentence… see, i’m already failing at the english language. i may need some time for this one. i’ll bust this out later… stay tuned, friend.

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